Could anyone take give me feedback for my POF profile?
Mon, 03/05/2012 - 01:45
Tue, 03/06/2012 - 12:21
#1
Hey dude the grand canyon pic
Hey dude the grand canyon pic is very hokey and conveys a lack of "fuckworthy" so get rid of it. Id say the same for the outstretched arms pic. The party one is pretty hilarious probably your best one. Ill take a look at your written stuff and give you feedback on that as well. The tacoeateron thing is copied from jeffy I believe. It does nothing for you in itself so Id come up with something cooler.
Tue, 03/06/2012 - 12:30
#2
The pinky/straw/coke thing is
The pinky/straw/coke thing is funny. Id say the first part after the Im so cool part is a bit weak. I almost see this whole thing as painting a caricature of yourself with super human traits and quirks.
Wed, 03/07/2012 - 04:35
#3
This is how i break it down, let me know what you think
1/ "Coool Cool Coool Cooool... I'm so cool' likees an NLP technique --> make them think i'm cool. And it's a hook for them to read my profile
2/ "Love working out. My new year resolution is running a half marathon and winning my first kickboxing match.
My greatest aspiration is to be a male stripper - it's a competitive niche!
Beyond finishing up my last year at school doing chemical engineering, I'm always running around finding adventures in the little stuff like strangers puppies and puddles"
--> Give them a lil part of who i am. Even though i gotta admit, the first sentence is kinda weak...
3/"Msg me if you are a laid back, social person. Oh and by the way drinking Coke from the bottle with a straw is classy if you ask me. Hell anything with a straw is classy as long as you do the pinkie thing."
--> I think this is pretty good
Let me know how else i can improve it. Btw, i took off the caption, and add 2 more pic that i took with my phone.. check out my okc profile also if you can... I got more result from it.. not sure why...
Thanks for reviewing it...
Erik,
2/ "Love working out. My new year resolution is running a half marathon and winning my first kickboxing match.
My greatest aspiration is to be a male stripper - it's a competitive niche!
Beyond finishing up my last year at school doing chemical engineering, I'm always running around finding adventures in the little stuff like strangers puppies and puddles"
--> Give them a lil part of who i am. Even though i gotta admit, the first sentence is kinda weak...
3/"Msg me if you are a laid back, social person. Oh and by the way drinking Coke from the bottle with a straw is classy if you ask me. Hell anything with a straw is classy as long as you do the pinkie thing."
--> I think this is pretty good
Let me know how else i can improve it. Btw, i took off the caption, and add 2 more pic that i took with my phone.. check out my okc profile also if you can... I got more result from it.. not sure why...
Thanks for reviewing it...
Erik,
Wed, 03/07/2012 - 07:23
#4
Take off the 2 pics I
Take off the 2 pics I mentioned. Why did youa dd two landscape pics that makes no sense.
Did you download the app and upload some convos?
Did you download the app and upload some convos?